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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it is a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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A section of individuals believe that moving
food
 by aircraft is an excellent idea and it should increase as
more
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 as possible.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why the community has two different
group
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 without similar opinion and the writer that absolutely agree with the first statement will explain
clearly
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it clearly
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. It can be seen that many
people
 really want to eat fruits or desserts with their countries hardly
grow
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 up or out of
its
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season. The main cause is transporting it by
airplane
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aeroplane
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 can make it
more fresh
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fresher
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 when was reached by costumers
due to
 arriving in lack of time.
As a result
, if you settle down in Vietnam and want to eat cherry, you should wait at the supermarkets
to
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until
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 the day the markets have it. To
beginning
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 with,
the
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 minority of
people
 do not think so, they think the farmers transport the native fruit that
out
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is out
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 of
seasons
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season
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 to
the
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apply
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other cities or countries to make a profit. It can be understood that we sell native
food
 to other places and make it like a strange thing so foreigners want to try it and
then
 we sell it
with
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at
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the
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a
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 higher cost than ever. More
people
 try to eat it, more profit to the salesman because abroad
people
 can not know about the real value of
this
 thing. Absolutely, it is
a
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selfish thinking and because they do not want to share anyone with their traditional
food
 to keep it
stranger
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 or more special that nobody can know exactly about it. To my mind, travelling
food
 by aircraft is a clever decision because we can keep it fresh
to
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so
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 abroad
people
 can feel
a
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the
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 special and spectacular of its smell and taste.
Besides
 that, using
plane
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a plane
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 can get fruits or vegetables to anywhere
that is
 a long way or a short distance in
the
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a
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 short time. I have no idea about a section of
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the community
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community’
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community
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 thinking that
do
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does
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 not agree with
this
 valid view.
Therefore
, aircraft is one of the most modern in the model or its useful.
Hence
, I agree with
an
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 opinion
support to use
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plane
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planes
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 to transport native
food
t
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to
 foreign countries to recommend
about
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apply
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our country to
another ones
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another one
other ones
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 because of their range of
benefit
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benefits
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.
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