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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both the views and give your opion.

#aircraft #transport #fruit #vegetables #countries #plants #season #people #idea #opion
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this
 day and age, technology is so popular and important
with
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to
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 everyone, especially, everyone can not stop thinking about
aircraft
, because there are more arguments about the negative and positive sides, more
people
 believe it
a
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good idea, but others oppose it.
With me
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Me
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, I agree
with
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aircraft
a
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is a
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good idea, and
this
 essay will show the reasons why I
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 that.
Firstly
,
aircraft
 is a good product that was created by
people
,
they
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who
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 hope it will bring more benefits to countries and
people
. Correctly, thanks to that,
people
 do not need to work but have still higher results like they just sit and control
aircraft
 by smartphone or computer, it helps
farmer
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 save more time to do other things. Seeing
positive
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the positive
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 sides, there are more things that we have to think carefully
.
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about.
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 With the benefits of
aircraft
, human
being
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beings
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 will feel worried when
it
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they
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 can make everything, and virtually, the percentage of unemployment will increase sharply in the future if technology or
robot
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robots
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 become famous with everyone. In conclusion, everything
have
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 two sides so
instead
 of arguments, we should think
the
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 best way to use
it
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them
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.
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