The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
The maps illustrate an industrial area in
the
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Norbition
town
now, and how it will develop in the future.
Overall
, the most noticeable development is related to an increasing number of facilities, converting factories into housing and a change of
road
. At the present day, the river is located in the south of the farmland. To the south of the
river
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river,
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we can see a
circle
road
which has two line roads situated in the east and south respectively. The
circle
road
is surrounded by eight factories.
Additionally
, there is a
town
in
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the left side of the
circle
road
.
However
, there are many new facilities that will be built in the industrial area of Norbiton
town
, which are shops,
medical
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a medical
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centre,
playground
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a playground
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and
school
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a school
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.
Shops
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The shops
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is
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are
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located
in
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on
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the west of the bigger
circle
road
whereas
medical
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the medical
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centre will
locate
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in
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on
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the east of it. The bigger
circle
road
which
initially
has two sides will change into four sides. All
of
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eight factories will be changed into seven housings.
Moreover
, the location of the
town
is remained
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remains
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unchanged.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, circle with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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