Most teenagers today own a smartphone. Provide your opinion to discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

Nowadays, every teenager has a smartphone because families changed over the years regarding human rights,
smartphones
have become a crucial thing to have for several reasons,
while
others believe that
smartphones
destroy their childhood.
This
essay will discuss
both
sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, people don't agree with teens having
smartphones
or anything related to it because they assume that these things will destroy their minds and
also
create a person they were never raised.
For example
, a family raised their
children
to be friendly and social with other people outside, but they took a smartphone and saw some hateful comments or a gothic website that affected them.
On the other hand
, most families these days buy
smartphones
for their
children
, thinking that their child will not be
depended
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and not have a strong personality.
For instance
, each parent will have a smartphone and most of the
children
outside as well, so the child may think that he/she is not the same or less than the other
children
. In conclusion, and after a careful analysis of
both
points of view, I could say that I don't relate to
both
opinions.
However
, I would say that
both
sides complete each other.
For example
, the parents have to work at the same time but their
children
are alone at the house so they must have
smartphones
so they can check on them, but
also
they shouldn't use the phone all day long. I hope
this
essay was clear enough and helpful and I hope you like it.
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