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Most teenagers today own a smartphone. Provide your opinion to discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Nowadays, every teenager has a smartphone because families changed over the years regarding human rights,
smartphones
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 have become a crucial thing to have for several reasons,
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 others believe that
smartphones
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 destroy their childhood.
This
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 essay will discuss
both
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 sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, people don't agree with teens having
smartphones
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 or anything related to it because they assume that these things will destroy their minds and
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 create a person they were never raised.
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, a family raised their
children
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 to be friendly and social with other people outside, but they took a smartphone and saw some hateful comments or a gothic website that affected them.
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, most families these days buy
smartphones
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 for their
children
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, thinking that their child will not be
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 and not have a strong personality.
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, each parent will have a smartphone and most of the
children
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 outside as well, so the child may think that he/she is not the same or less than the other
children
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. In conclusion, and after a careful analysis of
both
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 points of view, I could say that I don't relate to
both
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 opinions.
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, I would say that
both
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 sides complete each other.
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, the parents have to work at the same time but their
children
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 are alone at the house so they must have
smartphones
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 so they can check on them, but
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 they shouldn't use the phone all day long. I hope
this
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 essay was clear enough and helpful and I hope you like it.
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