Many scientists believe that now we can study the behavior of a three-years-old child to see whether they will grow up to be criminals.To what extend do you think crime is determined by human nature?Is it possible to stop children from going up to be criminals?

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Numerous experts assert that, in recent times, it is possible to assess the conduct of a child at the age of three to understand whether or not they will become criminals in their adulthood. In my opinion,
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some personal characteristics can cause
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to commit a crime, education and parental upbringing play a role in preventing
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from criminal activities.   Engaging in criminal activities can result from some personal traits.
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, when acting as selfish and arrogant
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, individuals may consider a right for themselves to carry out any activity without considering regulations or even others' advice.
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, in Vietnam, studies indicated that criminals who were arrested presented rarely  disciplined behaviour during their childhood
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the schools' records.
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, as
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may be irresponsible in both their social and personal lives, they are less likely to think about their social status,
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not respecting
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or others' rights. Ultimately, because
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may be brought up with the features of impatience and intolerance, they may be unable to handle hard situations, especially  economic issues, leading to a temptation to satisfy their needs illegally.   Notwithstanding, teachers and parents should take the responsibility to teach
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to abide
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. In the first place, as a school is like a minor society to live life, teachers should set the rules for the classes, which if
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do not follow, they will be confronted with a mild punishment. Students,
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, will practise to respect
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to avoid negative consequences.
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, were
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not to come from a family where the parents themselves broke
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, they would not be potentially prepared to ignore regulations in society.
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is because there is a  close between parental upbringing and
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's personality.
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, in accordance with a study in Japan, a large proportion of criminals belonged to unstable families which had experienced crimes to accommodate their needs.
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, parents should be extremely concerned about the environment, in which
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are brought up.   In conclusion,
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it may be acceptable  that
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with a few characteristics have more potential for offensive behaviour, it is hard to deny the roles of families and schools to learn how to respect
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as well as
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citizens' rights.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime
  • criminal behavior
  • human nature
  • environmental factors
  • interventions
  • prevent
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