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The table shows the cost of water in five cities in Australia. Summarize the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the cost of water in five cities in Australia. Summarize the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table details how much residents in five Australian
cities
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 are required to pay for
water
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 consumption. A glance at the table reveals that people living in
Adelaide
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 and
Perth
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 pay the least if they
use
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 less than 125KL, or else they pay the most. Another highlight is that households in
Perth
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 have the highest average bill for
water
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 usage among
five
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the five
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 surveyed
cities
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. Locals in
Adelaide
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 and
Perth
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 only have to pay $0.42 per kiloliter if they
use
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 less than 125KL, roughly half of the price for those of other
cities
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.
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, if
water
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use
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 in
two
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the two
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 aforementioned
cities
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 surpasses 125KL, the cost nearly doubles ($1.00) in
Adelaide
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 or almost triples ($1.50) in
Perth
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. Residents in Melbourne and Sydney pay the same amount of money, $0.78 and $0.98 respectively, regardless of how much
water
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 they
use
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. Brisbane’s people only pay an extra $0.03 if they
use
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 more than 125KL. In general, people residing in
Perth
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 have the highest cost of
water
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use
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, at $332, far exceeding the figures for Sydney ($319),
Adelaide
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 ($312) and Brisbane ($310). Households’ spending on
water
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 consumption in Melbourne is only $253, the smallest amount recorded among five
cities
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost of living
  • urban infrastructure
  • utility rates
  • supply and demand
  • metropolitan areas
  • water consumption
  • price variation
  • tariff systems
  • economic factors
  • budget allocation
  • household expenditure
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