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Band 4

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/ unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntarylunpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntarylunpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntarylunpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir; I have seen your advertisement looking For
Volunteer
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Volunteers
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 to work at the museum.I am writing to request
for joining
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to join
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this
Linking Words
 volunteer work I have
a
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apply
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graduated from
University
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the University
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, College of History ,
therefore
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Work
Wrong verb form
Working
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 on the museum Would be suitable
with
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if
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 I had read
on
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about
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 the college ,
also
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spread
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spreading
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 the knowledge and information on What happened
last
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 Decades will be more fascinating are knowledgeable for myself and visitors
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 it can develop my communication skills And meet all the departments of
the
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apply
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society,
And
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apply
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 doing
this
Linking Words
 unpaid
works
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work
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 like a kind of national service I
have been
Verb problem
apply
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volunteered when I was a student and
participate
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participated
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of
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in
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 many medical Conveys So I have experience
on
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in
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 organisation and high-performance office tasks .And even a leadership skills and responsibilities
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this
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apply
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because I was a supervisor of several
sector
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sectors
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 of conveys ‏ ‏I will be available all the days of week except Friday, for
next
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the next
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 three months before
move
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moving
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 outside the country I hope respond to my request as soon as you can and be honour and pleasant to be a volunteer
on
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at
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 a museum for
awhile
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a while
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 gratefully yours
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time
  • voluntary/unpaid work
  • museum
  • apply
  • director
  • skills
  • qualities
  • availability
  • interest
  • opportunity
  • passion
  • contribution
  • community
  • exhibit
  • knowledge
  • communication
  • organizational
  • time management
  • flexible
  • dedicated
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