The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The line graph displays detailed information on the numbers of attendees at the cinema
among
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between
age
7-14,15-24,25-35,35 and over between 2000 and 2011.
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ages
Overall
,it is evident from the chart that although
there are alteration
,there's an upward trend in all age groups.
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alterations
To begin
with,in 2000,the number of people who visited the cinema was around 15 to 24, being the highest in that year while
the least
was 35 and over at 1%. The figure Correct word choice
lowest
of
people between 15-24 and 35 above increased rapidly Change preposition
for
although
there were fluctuations and was at 51% hitting the peak of the chart and 12% respectively in 2011.
Furthermore
,a similar pattern was observed among people aged 7-14 and 15-24,as there was
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were
varaiations
over the years with an intersection at 15% between 2004 and 2006 and 32% from 2008-2010 and both stood at 30% in 2011.Correct your spelling
variations
variation
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