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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes and drive cars. Will this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

#computer #technology #business #crime #detection #planes #drive #cars #dependence
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 robots.Telecommunications evolving from day to day.In
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 each one progressively
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 new technology for everything
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 life. In
this
 article, I will examine both of these aspects in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
 ,the primary advantage is that
people
 have much time to work themselves. Modern life provides
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qualification
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,education,
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 computer literacy.
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 of a lifetime guide to
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 future.To give an instance in
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 century the majority of
people
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main goal is education and computer literacy which leads to
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 career.
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,
this
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On the contrary
, there are numerous drawbacks as well.
First,
the main disadvantage is that not
each one
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everyone
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 has enough money to buy modern technology.It provides
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 social inequality. Second the fact is that everybody now
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internet
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the internet
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. Information overload is the difficulty in understanding an issue and effectively
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 a decision. Fake news ,actually all news fast spreads around the world.
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people
.To illustrate today has a various
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 of online shopping . Online shopping is the most popular way to save time. Have
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people
 who don’t get that online shopping.They always trust the fake stores and lose their money.To give
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more examples scammers fraud
people
 ,find their password ,
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 minute and no money in the bank.
Therefore
 it is essential to have
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computer literacy. In conclusion, without any doubt, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
Therefore
, I would like to say that every coin has two sides. If somehow we met with the evil part, still variety of solutions still exist. So we have to pay attention to it and double-check when
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 a decision before doing something.
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