The migration of people to cities is one of the biggest problems facing the world's cities today. Discuss the main causes. What solutions could be used to tackle the situation?

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In recent years the frequency of people migrating to large
cities
has increased, becoming a major problem in many
cities
worldwide. The poor accessibility to resources and
wealth
for a great part of the population worldwide
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is one of the main causes of
this
phenomenon. Many
cities
in the
world
have experienced large changes which should be reflected in the economic growth of each county, providing benefits to their communities.
However
,
this
is not the reality in these countries. The acquisitive power around the
world
, corruption and bad distribution of
wealth
has led to more citizen found themselves in the need to leave their countries with the aim
to find
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better opportunities for
them
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and family. It is common these days,
for example
, to hear the new generation speaking about travel to a foreign country since early years because of the lack of opportunities for them in their homeland. It is necessary to change
this
unfortunate reality and bring more opportunities for the population in many
cities
around the
world
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so that they can stay in their countries. It is possible for governments to have a development, ensuring the rights of their citizens.
In addition
, sharing equitably the
wealth
of the country by creating better infrastructures of schools, hospitals,
public
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transports
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and conserving the natural resources of
cities
around the
world
, ensures more free citizens in their own nation.
This
would decrease the migration of many people, which would result in fewer social problems
such
as xenophobia. As we can see, by having a fair distribution of
wealth
, we can ensure citizen
happier
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in their own homeland.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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