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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying that some college students are divided in their opinion regarding learning more than
one
 qualification and pursuing a single subject. These two different perspectives are more or less affected by their passion which leads to determining their
role
 in society. Generally speaking, having more than 2 experts could enrich our impact in pursuing our career path.
Furthermore
, understanding lots of fields is essential to becoming a significant leader.
For example
, when I attended a global conference two months ago,
one
 of the speakers was the CTO of Alibaba and he emphasized that generalists are much more needed in the future. He gave an example of his impact when leading Alibaba with expertise in technology and business that resulted in the company’s achievement. In return, his initiatives successfully received more funding from investors that contributed to Alibaba’s financial sustainability.
Likewise
, becoming an expert in a specific subject helps us to maintain consistency in
one
 dedicated
role
.
Moreover
, it is worth considering that being a specialist is much easier to receive trust in a more advanced position.
For instance
, I met a senior HR at the company’s event and she has been pursuing a human resource
role
 since she graduated from university. Until today, she is being trusted with chief level position
due to
 her more than 10 years’ experience in the human resource field.
Overall
, both generalists and specialists are always an option for students in deciding their interests and future roles in society. Either studying various subjects or focusing on
one
 field has the same level of importance which will shape us to pursue a desired
role
 with a broader impact in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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