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Computer have changed the way people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aids? Keyword : Computers / Study

#computer #people #study #computers #aids #keyword
Nowadays technologies have popular day by day
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all over the world. laptop has been a useful equipment for masses in the
study
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such
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powerpoint
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PowerPoint
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while
, it has some
worst
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 impact
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study
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 of view.
To begin
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 side, It might be said that computers provide a lot of knowledge
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the
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study
such
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making
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by
powerpoint
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PowerPoint
, learning projects by
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 have been simplest
as a result
 juveniles can not only work independently but
also
 learn technical skills without any aids of other person.
For example
, some researchers have shown that In the United Kingdom pupil
study
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the
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software continuously because it
has
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lesser
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offer
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 a fruitful benefit to everyone.
On the other hand
, game apps have been installed
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since
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 10 years continuously leading to,Not only brain powers
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also
 health issues
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increasing in the
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public
.
For instance
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glaucoma
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seen
continuosly
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continuously
 because of playing computers game
almost
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 four to six hours.
Moreover
, mortality cases have surged by spending more time
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laptop
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.
To sum up
, even though
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computers
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plethora
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benefit
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 to the individuals
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, it has some
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disadvantages
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wrong
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 ways like playing PUBG
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 their computers.
Therefore
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also
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also
.
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