Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Others think that they should act politely in all circumstances. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your opinion.

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Over the

last

few decades, there has been a tremendous increase in the number of individuals questioning

behaves

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the behaviour

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of professional

athletes

. Some people believe that arrogance and unprofessionalism can be forgiven, if

player

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a player

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demonstrates the

game winning

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game-winning

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performance.

While

, others, including myself, argue that sportsmanship on and off the pitch should be the main value for professional sportsmen. Many people suggest that there is no problem in

sportsman’s

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sportsmen’s

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misbehaves. Proponents of

this

view may suggest that if sportspeople are able to win titles and perform good results, society should be indulgent

for

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their hooliganism.

Abovementioned

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The abovementioned

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way of thinking was demonstrated regarded to football icon – Maradona in the 90s. Despite the fact that Maradona was suspended

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for

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the usage of cocaine and relations with the criminal gang, football fans did not stop

to support

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the legend and considered him

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apply

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a God of football.

On the other hand

, I am in agreement with those who believe that

athletes

have to demonstrate sportsmanship no matter where they are. Nowadays, sportspeople are not only

athletes

, they are

also

influencers in social media, who

has

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thousands of youth followers and fans. Every act of

misbehave

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misbehaving

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can be understood as

value

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valuable

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young

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the young

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generation.

For

this

reason, disrespectfulness for the opponent or arrogance should not be welcomed

from

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society members. In conclusion,

whereas

many believe that

sport

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sports

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athletes

should be free from social blaming for their bad

behaves

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behaviour

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, I side with those who suggest that it is vital to be kind and calm inside and outside of the field for professionals. It is extremely beneficial for sportspeople themselves and

supporter

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supporters

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youngsters

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of youngsters

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

267 words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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