Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Others think that they should act politely in all circumstances. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your opinion.

Over the
last
few decades, there has been a tremendous increase in the number of individuals questioning
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of professional
athletes
. Some people believe that arrogance and unprofessionalism can be forgiven, if
player
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a player
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demonstrates the
game winning
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performance.
While
, others, including myself, argue that sportsmanship on and off the pitch should be the main value for professional sportsmen. Many people suggest that there is no problem in
sportsman’s
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misbehaves. Proponents of
this
view may suggest that if sportspeople are able to win titles and perform good results, society should be indulgent
for
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in
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their hooliganism.
Abovementioned
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way of thinking was demonstrated regarded to football icon – Maradona in the 90s. Despite the fact that Maradona was suspended
in
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for
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the usage of cocaine and relations with the criminal gang, football fans did not stop
to support
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the legend and considered him
as
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apply
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a God of football.
On the other hand
, I am in agreement with those who believe that
athletes
have to demonstrate sportsmanship no matter where they are. Nowadays, sportspeople are not only
athletes
, they are
also
influencers in social media, who
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thousands of youth followers and fans. Every act of
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can be understood as
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by
young
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the young
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generation.
For
this
reason, disrespectfulness for the opponent or arrogance should not be welcomed
from
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by
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society members. In conclusion,
whereas
many believe that
sport
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athletes
should be free from social blaming for their bad
behaves
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behaviour
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, I side with those who suggest that it is vital to be kind and calm inside and outside of the field for professionals. It is extremely beneficial for sportspeople themselves and
supporter
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supporters
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youngsters
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of youngsters
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.
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