Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People

have different views about whether these days advertising can attract society to buy something or it has no longer an effect on them.

While

advertisements

are useful and can attract

people

's attention, I believe that nowadays

due to

the variety of colourful

advertisements

people

have no particular reaction to them. On one hand, because of the variety of the same products that are produced by several factories, a creative advertisement can significantly affect

people

's minds and push them to pay for the advertised goods.

Furthermore

, a new and innovative way of showing a

product

such

as vibrant billboards in bustling streets or holding lotteries can help to increase the sales of a company's goods.

For instance

, in Iran, a factory which produces dairy products

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distributes small packets of curd among

people

in crowded streets and shopping malls. So, it helped them to introduce their factory and their productions to

people

from all walks of life, and now they are popular among the Iranian community by their special way of advertising.

On the other hand

, advertising can not persuade

people

to buy a good or their necessities from a particular brand. Rather, it is a quality of an end

product

of a company, which is important for consumers.

Also

, in my opinion,

people

are the best means of advertising for a

product

. Because whenever an individual buys a good, the satisfaction with that

product

can turn him/her into a permanent customer.

Moreover

this

person can attract many customers to that factory by informing his/her relatives or friends. So, an employer should prioritize the quality of their productions over their

advertisements

. In conclusion, I can understand why some

people

believe in the extreme effects of

advertisements

, but it seems to me that concentrating on the quality of products is much more effective.

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3Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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impact
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