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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly gro or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea but some people oppose it. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

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The
airline
 has
it
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popularity significantly
risen
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in the transmission of many
nation
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 fruits and vegetables and
especially
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 used to deliver to areas lacking
of
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these products.
While
 many people find
this
 usage of aircraft reasonable. others suggest that means of delivering is unnecessary. My
easay
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essay
 will explain why many encourage
this
 tendency and some believe that there are other methods that are
also
 more relevant for transference. Airlines are known
that
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for
its
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their
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 incredible speed of
communiting
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communication
 from are paint to another which can be utilized
in
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not only for
human's
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 travelling but
also
 for transporting goods and
cargoes
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.
This
 means that when
area
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an area
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 or region was to suffer from
famine
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a famine
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that is
 unsuitable for
there
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their
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 crops,
tramission
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transmission
 by air would be the most
appreciate
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 treatment to tackle the problem.
Aditionally
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Additionally
, many countries like the United
Nation
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, China and Russia have numerous
airline
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airlines
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 only for exchanging and exporting products.
For instance
, in China only where various
kind
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kinds
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 of
wheter
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weather
 can be found, spend attention
agricultural
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to agricultural
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 issues
due to
 the
convinience
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convenience
 of an aircraft that contributes a
workbale
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workable
 part in solving these concerns.
Advantegeous
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Advantageous
 as the
airline
 are , the
airline
 itself requires tonnes of fuel like coal. gas and oil
avtivate
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activate
activates
 the
enginies
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engines
engine
.
Therefor
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,
this
 is the main
reasons
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reason
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 why many people reject using aircraft as means of transportation regardless of
it
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its
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 favourable
altribute
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attribute
attributes
.
A research
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 at the
vironmental
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environmental
insitute
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institute
Insitute
 in
Carlifornia
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California
 shows that 27% of the carbon dioxide released into the atmosphere affecting the air quality of numerous countries are what
airline
are
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respon
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respond
. In
concluson
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conclusion
,
although
 airlines make
a good transportation ideas
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good transportation ideas
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 not mean that it should be
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an increadible
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increadible
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incredible
 rise.
Otherwise
,the world will have to face
wore
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seriously
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 environmental problems in the next decade leading to much more significant consequences.
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