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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#aircraft #transport #fruits #vegetables #countries #plants #season #people #idea
Nowadays,
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the airplane
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 is
in
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common
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 used to deliver fruits and vegetables
for
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in
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 many
countries
 where
have
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plants are hard to grow
up
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 or end of the season. Many think it is a good idea, but some don’t. In my opinion,
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 question is a debatable question which
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 two sides of the main idea and the authorities will discuss the reason
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this
 opinion. On the one hand,
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 are the most convenient way to support some
country
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countries
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about
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 get out of poverty and some kind of famine. Generally, in a few
countries
,
air
 transportation is very expensive. For long distances,
many
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moneys
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money
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have
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 to
spend
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, just
for
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 fuel and fee services. The fact said that
,
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air
 pollution increases every year because
this
 problem causes a part. And generally, it can’t save
many
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 fuel than the others
such
 as train or car.
On the other hand
,
air
 transportation is an excellent way to exploit
less
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 employers and
times
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. It can help
human
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humans
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about
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 get more
times
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 to prepare new ones or do something else. In some first world
countries
, they will deliver their foods and supplements
for
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 some
countries
 that
having
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 poor quality
life
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of life
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 and always have famine
that
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 can
effect
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affect
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on
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the economics of that country or
being
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 a social problem
such
 as poverty. Taking everything into account, using
air
 transportation can be more convenient in some circumstances, but we need to reduce the percentage of aircraft to protect the environment because it is the main reason
of
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air
 pollution.
Besides
 that, concentrate on de
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