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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent laguage in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language?

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Nowadays,
English
, to improve tourism, is the most considerable
language
 used by many countries in all societies. Some believe that
English
 will be a common means of communication in the whole world because of its universality,
although
 there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In
this
 essay, I will examine both of these aspects in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, it is obvious that
English
 is a fundamental
language
 and is taught to all students as the first or second foreign word in each of the schools.
Thus
, almost everyone knows
this
,
hence
 conversations between foreigners have been much easier, especially in tourism industries.
For instance
, if visitors from others need to know rules
such
 as traffic and culture,
then
 unit
language
 will be significantly effective in order to understand the dwellers of these areas .
Secondly
, another advantage of having one
language
 is that creates conditions for ensuring access to information and getting an education. To exemplify, a person, by learning a
language
, can easily read and benefit from other states' university materials. In today's case, you can not understand these so as do not know their
language
.
Consequently
, using all materials in a single form and adopting everybody a format supports the right to get an education.
On the other hand
, the mono-
English
 system would possibly vanish, particularly in minorities. In general terms, the
language
 of the public is not only a communication means but
also
 the history, culture and traditions of nations. To give an example, for indigenous peoples in North America,
English
 is their first
language
 and now they hardly use their own mother tongue in daily life.
Therefore
, the usage of
this
 style can cause forgetting of individual characteristics, attributes, and specialities,
as a result
, these historical virtues might disappear from local society.
In other words
, it seems as if ethnic cleansing. In conclusion,
while
 societies can benefit from a single global
language
 like
English
, it can
also
 bring out the elimination of some communities' history.
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task response
You have addressed the topic adequately and presented both sides of the argument. Well done!
coherence cohesion
Your essay flows well and the ideas are organized logically. However, consider providing a stronger introduction and conclusion to create a clearer structure.
lexical resource
You have used varied vocabulary and the words are suitable for the topic. Good job!
grammatical range
Overall, your grammar is accurate, but you can further improve by paying attention to sentence structure and word order.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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