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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.
The given chart illustrates the total
oil
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 used in the
USA
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,
China
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, the
Middle
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 East, Western Europe and
Japan
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 from 2009 to 1015 and the estimation of 2025 and 2030.
Overall
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, there was an increase in the total
oil
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 expenditure of users in
China
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 and the
Middle
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 East over the period examined,
while
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 it saw a decrease in the
USA
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, Western Europe and
Japan
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.
In addition
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, the
USA
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 has the consistently largest figure. At the beginning of the duration, the total
oil
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 consumption in the
USA
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 started at just under 10
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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, after which it saw a slight rise to about 10
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 in 2015.
Similarly
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, in the first four years, the figures for
China
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 and the
Middle
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 East grew from 2 to around 3
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 and from 2 to approximately 2,5
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 in that order.
Conversely
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, the numbers of those in Western Europe and
Japan
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 experienced a decline from exactly 4 to 3
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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. The total
oil
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 bought
day
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-to-
day
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 in the
USA
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, Western and
Japan
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 is expected to drop from 10 to just under 8
million
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barrels
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 and from 3 to exactly 2
million
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barrels
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 between 2015 and 2030. The figures for
China
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 and the
Middle
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 East will grow, before reaching nearly 4 and 3
million
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barrels
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 in the final year, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, usa, china, middle, japan, million, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil
  • consumption
  • total
  • use
  • country
  • year
  • 2009
  • 2030
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • stay the same
  • remain
  • high
  • highest
  • low
  • lowest
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • difference
  • gap
  • trend
  • pattern
  • compare
  • compared with
  • in comparison with
  • lead
  • leader
  • by
  • in
  • from
  • to
  • by 2030
  • in 2009
  • more
  • most
  • less
  • least
  • upward
  • downward
  • steady
  • stable
  • peak
  • level off
  • economy
  • population
  • policy
  • technology
  • price
  • supply
  • environment
  • future
  • coming years
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