The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

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The bar chart gives information about the estimated global

illteracy

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illiteracy

literacy

rates over the past

year

by gender and 6 different regions

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, all regions had more illiteracy women than men

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before that

year

as well as

South Asia and

Sub Saharan

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Africa illiteracy rate widespread, than other the three places. In South Asia, the number of people who is bot not able to read or write

about

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percent

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, women and 35

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men, which was the highest rate in the prior

year

than the other regions.

However

, developed

countires

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countries

have few individuals who are not

read

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write, approximately 3 proportion female and 1

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male in the

last

year

. Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa have the same number of people who are illiterate

male

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, around 30

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in both places. Latin American and

Caribben

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Caribbean

males and females whose illiterate people were the same

percent

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about 10 proportion or above that .

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