IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar chart gives information about the estimated global
illteracy
Correct your spelling
illiteracy
literacy
 rates over the past
year
Use synonyms
 by gender and 6 different regions
Overall
Linking Words
, all regions had more illiteracy women than men
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
before that
year
Use synonyms
,
as well as
Linking Words
 South Asia and
Sub Saharan
Add a hyphen
Sub-Saharan
show examples
 Africa illiteracy rate widespread, than other the three places. In South Asia, the number of people who is bot not able to read or write
about
Add a missing verb
is about
show examples
 55
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
, women and 35
percentage
Replace the word
per cent
show examples
 men, which was the highest rate in the prior
year
Use synonyms
 than the other regions.
However
Linking Words
, developed
countires
Correct your spelling
countries
 have few individuals who are not
read
Correct your spelling
ready
show examples
ot
Correct your spelling
or
 write, approximately 3 proportion female and 1
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 male in the
last
Linking Words
year
Use synonyms
. Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa have the same number of people who are illiterate
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
show examples
, around 30
percentage
Replace the word
per cent
show examples
 in both places. Latin American and
Caribben
Correct your spelling
Caribbean
 males and females whose illiterate people were the same
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 about 10 proportion or above that .

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: