Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others think that people can not be expected to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whether to choose a satisfying

job

or a satisfying paycheck is a great dilemma for

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generation. Some

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the

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individual

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says that a

secure

job

is more crucial than a satisfying

job

while

other think that

satisfaction

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job

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a job

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is more significant

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secure

job

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essay intends to

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interpret

both viewpoints. I, personally with the former view. There are

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various

causes to select a

secure

job

. First of all, a

secure

job

ensure

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regular income which is very significant to

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one's living like daily expenses,

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rent, debts and some savings for retirement.

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people

who choose a

secure

job

they

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feel less stress

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being fired for their silly mistakes than the

people

who choose

satisfying

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job

Farthermore

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Furthermore

, a

secure

job

ensure stability in the

job

sector and it

also

give

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several opportunities to increase

their

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productivity and profitability.

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people

who

right

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behind the satisfying

job

argued

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that a satisfying

job

is significant to

create

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a better

worklife

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work-life

work life

balance.

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, a satisfying

job

motivate

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employees to become more

dedicative

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dedicated

for

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the

organsiation

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organisation

which

help

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to increase the productivity of the

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organisation

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satisfaction

reduce

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work stress which is

also

important to lead a

batter

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life. To cite an example, a

freelencer

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freelancer

can work

according to

their willingness which

help

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them to create a good

worklife

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work-life

work life

balance and to lead to

better

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life. I believe that, though

job

satisfaction

have

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enormous benefits

but

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job

security is more important than

job

satisfaction

. Because

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people

mind

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are so dynamic their

mind

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and demand change with time when they achieve

job

satisfaction

they expect more so,

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think

this

job

satisfaction

is not constant.

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job

satisfaction

reduce

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their productivity which is detrimental

for

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their creative thinking. After fulfilling

job

satisfaction

they become less ambitious

and

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which

make

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makes

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them dull.

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Conversely

, a

secure

job

motivate employees to give their best

afford

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effort

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with little worries about being fired. In conclusion,

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would like to reiterate my opinion that, though

job

satisfaction

is important in

workplace

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the workplace

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but

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job

security is more significant than it because

job

security

ensure

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regular income and keep individuals

stress free

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fron

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from

being fired.

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Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others think that people can not be expected to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world. in your opinion, should school be compulsory for all children, or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home?

The widespread of the Internet gives people more freedom to work and study at home instead of traveling to office and school. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Some people think that older employees contribute most to the success of a company. Others think that younger people play a more vital role. Discuss both views and disccuss your opinion.

With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?