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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 some individuals believe that advertising is highly effective in encouraging us to buy stuff, others think that advertising is not sufficient to
pursue
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encourage
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people
 to buy things. Both of these views will be
further
 discussed in the following paragraphs. In my view, these days,
advertisements
 are successful enough to have an impact on humans. On the one hand, there is a group who think
advertisements
 have an effect on
people
's decisions when they want to purchase things.
Moreover
, these
people
 claim that if one thing is repeated many times and individuals see it from time to time, it affects the individual's brain, and they cannot forget it.
Nevertheless
,
according to
this
 theory, when a person goes shopping, the possibility of purchasing an advertised brand is high.
In addition
, they said some
advertisements
 are so innovative and attractive that they go viral on social media, and most
people
 talk about these specific
advertisements
.
Accordingly
, their claim indicates the success of advertising to encourage humans to buy.
On the other hand
, there is a group who believe that advertising is ineffective in changing an individual's decisions about purchasing stuff.
Moreover
, they think
people
 do not pay attention to
advertisements
 on billboards, television, and social media.
For instance
, when a person sees an advertisement on television, changes the channel, or when someone scrolls on Instagram and sees a post which has an advertisement, they mostly skip it.
Nonetheless
, the number of characteristics who pay attention to these
advertisements
 is low because they are boring and not attractive.
Therefore
, numerous numbers of
people
 do not care about these
advertisements
. In summary,
people
 are only two groups; some believe
advertisements
 are effective, and others think they are ineffective. I can understand why
people
 might consider
advertisements
 as a pointless way to encourage
people
 to buy. Still, it seems to me that advertising is useful in affecting an individual's choice.
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  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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