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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
The line graph illustrates three types of offences (burglary, car theft, and robbery) in Machester city centre over 9 years from 2003-2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of burglaries dropped dramatically over the given period,
while
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 the
rate
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 of car thefts increased.
Nevertheless
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, the number of robberies did not change a lot. With regards to burglary, it went up slightly from 3400
cases
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 in the first year to 3600 in 2004.
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, the
rate
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 of
this
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 crime went down, reaching more than 1000
cases
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 in 2008.
Following
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this
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, the figure rose to around 1300
cases
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at the end
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 of the period. When it comes to robbery, it started at more than 500
cases
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 in 2003. After that, its
rate
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 fluctuated and stood at the same point in 2012. Regarding car theft, it started with 2300
cases
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 in 2003. The figure
then
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 fell to 2000
cases
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 in 2006. In the next six years, the
rate
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 climbed gradually, reaching the highest point of 2800
cases
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 in the end.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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