The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
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The line graph illustrates three types of offences (burglary, car theft, and robbery) in Machester city centre over 9 years from 2003-2012.
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it is clear that
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the number of burglaries dropped dramatically over the given period,
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the
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of car thefts increased.
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, the number of robberies did not change a lot. With regards to burglary, it went up slightly from 3400
cases
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in the first year to 3600 in 2004.
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, the
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of
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crime went down, reaching more than 1000
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in 2008.
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, the figure rose to around 1300
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at the end
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of the period. When it comes to robbery, it started at more than 500
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in 2003. After that, its
rate
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fluctuated and stood at the same point in 2012. Regarding car theft, it started with 2300
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in 2003. The figure
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fell to 2000
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in 2006. In the next six years, the
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climbed gradually, reaching the highest point of 2800
cases
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in the end.
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