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Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed that people who use a foreign
language
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 in everyday life can create social and practical issues.
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, I disagree with the statement above since
language
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 brings benefits in today’s world.
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, I will explain the reasons in the paragraph below.
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, the number of international companies in Indonesia is increasing every year. Many youth these days prefer to work in foreign organizations because they can give high salaries,
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 workplace, and a place to learn.
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, international companies become a place for
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youngsters to practice their foreign
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 skills since the management and colleagues are foreigners.
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, it is very important to excel in foreign languages in order to bridge the
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 barrier
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 as English.
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 a positive impact in today’s world because it can be a weapon for wider connections especially in business.
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, multilingualism become more important. It can
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 up employment opportunities because by being able to speak a foreign
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, societies could make a real connection with people and know more about diverse cultures, places, and so on.
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, the number of
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 who
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 in developing business in Indonesia remain increasing. It is because of the beautiful landscape and higher probability of getting many profit.
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, it is essential for job seekers to good and understand foreign languages. In conclusion, it is not true that foreign
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language
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 can bring social and practical issues. The fast-paced business today requires human civilization to master more than one
language
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. Societies are
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 able to get benefits
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 as opening up many opportunities to find a job and eliminating gap barriers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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