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With the rise in popularity of the Internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often thought that the
Internet
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 will replace the newspapers. In my opinion, I agree with
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 view because it is convenient, affordable, and environmentally friendly.
Firstly
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, getting the
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 by using mobile phones is much easier compared to reading the newspaper.
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,
people
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 who have access to the
Internet
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 can get the information that they want anytime and anywhere.
Nevertheless
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, if
people
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 want to read the newspaper, they often go to the nearest shop, which can be troublesome.
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, on a rainy day, it would be much easier for
people
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 to get to know the
news
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 around the world through social media rather than having a hard copy of the newspaper.
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,
companies
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 will save a large amount of money.
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 to say, by using the online platform, they will not spend a lot of money to print newspapers and deliver them to their destination.
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, several
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 have started to reduce the number of
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 publications and focus on online
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,
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 as BBC, Daily
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 and The Sun.
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, the
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 has helped the environment to be preserved because it avoids environmental problems,
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 as deforestation. In the past, when the
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 was not well developed, most publication
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 relied heavily on paper to share the
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 with the public, and
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 was one of the reasons why many trees were cut. To illustrate, in Saudi Arabia, many
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 have switched to online
news
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 with the aim of protecting the environment.
To sum up
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,
while
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people
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 may vary in their opinion, I believe that by using the
Internet
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, both
companies
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 and individuals will stop spending unnecessary money and save the environment. If all countries band using newspapers, the nature would improve.
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