The bar chart illustrates how families spent weekly in the year of 2018 and 2022.

The bar chart illustrates how families spent weekly in the year of 2018 and 2022.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart illustrates how families spent weekly in the year of 2018 and 2022.
The bar chart illustrates how families spent weekly in the year of 2018 and 2022.
Overall
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, it is evident that spending on food was maximum in 2018, where people spent most money
in
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on
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leisure purposes. In terms of food, families spent around 35% of
weekly
Correct pronoun usage
their weekly
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income
for
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on
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food in 2018,
whereas
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it became half in 2022.
While
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the expenditure on fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and personal goods were 10%, 15%,
20
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and 20
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%, respectively in 2018, these figures were reduced by around 3% to 5% in 2022.
By contrast
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, the spending
of
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on
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housing, transport, and leisure witnessed a sharp increase. The percentage of spending on leisure was 8% in 2018,
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however
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however,
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it escalated 3 times in 2022.
While
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transportation and housing
expenditure
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expenditures
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were around 8% and 10% in 2018, these figures were increased substantially in 2022, 14% for Transportation and 20% for housing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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