Some people think that the popularity of the cinemas around the world has declined. Do you agree or disagree?

In the modern era,
people
prefer to watch
movies
on phones or on TV than go to the cinemas to watch but demand for cinemas is stable.I partially agree with the
viewpoints
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that the popularity of cinemas has declined. On the one hand, Everyone in the world is busy becoming successful as they are working hard in study or at work and they do not have too much time to go to the cinema to watch
movies
.
However
,
community
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the community
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do not prefer to watch
movies
in
cunema
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as they have small
threatre
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theatre
rooms in their homes as well and the flick which
are
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is
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released in the
cinplex
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complex
cineplex
are already available on apps like
netfilx
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Netflix
NetFlix
and adults prefer to watch alone so they see them online.
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of
this
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the cost of the flip ticket is too much
expnsive
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expensive
and fewer and fewer
people
afford the cost of the ticket.
Whereas
, there are many
people
who love to go
in
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picture
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threat to watch the movie as they
excited
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to see the films in
the
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public.
In addition
to
this
, Most
of
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the
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families prefer to see the theatre on weekends because of their busy routine and want to spend some time with their family
as well as
there are some
people
who want to see newly released
movies
in the picture house rather than in another place.
For example
, there is a study shows that all the threat in
surrey
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is overbooked on
the
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Saturday and Sunday
then
the weekdays. In conclusion, the demand for flick
house
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houses
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has not declined because
people
prefer to watch the cinema but
due to
their busy schedule and expensive entry
ticket
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tickets
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they do not go often
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • popularity
  • declined
  • online streaming platforms
  • cinema attendance
  • convenience
  • affordability
  • competition
  • unique experience
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