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A friend invited you to join his birthday party next week, but you are too busy to attend. Write a letter to explain your situation and express your feelings. #friend #birthday #party #week #situati

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Dear Jay, I hope you are doing well and are in the best spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I will not be able to attend your
birthday
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 party. First of
all
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all,
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 thank you so much for the
birthday
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 party invitation. I was waiting badly to meet you and have
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of topics to discuss with you but unfortunately will not
able
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be able
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 to make
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this
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it this
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 time because of my tight office schedule.
From
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For
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 the
last
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 1 month, we
all
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have all
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are
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been
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 working in shifts as we need to deliver the new project in the next two months and the manager has requested to not take leave unless it is
due to
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the
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apply
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medical reasons.
Additionally
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 ,my shift starts at 4 pm and
end
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ends
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 by 2 am so will not
able
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be able
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 to make it to your evening
birthday
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 party. I am feeling so sad that
this
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 time I will be breaking the tradition of celebrating
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birthday's
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birthdays
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 together that we have followed from the
begining
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beginning
 of our friendship.Hope you will forgive me and will have a
birthday
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 full of lots of love and happiness from friends and family members. Sorry once again for not joining the
birthday
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 celebration . Warm regards, Payal

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking the letter into more distinct paragraphs. For instance, one paragraph could cover your regrets about missing the party, while another could focus on your busy schedule. This would help in enhancing clarity and coherence.
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Make sure to check for small grammatical errors and typos, such as 'I was waiting badly' which could be revised to 'I was really looking forward' and 'will not able' should be 'will not be able'. These small errors can affect the overall impression.
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You expressed your feelings genuinely, which helps to convey a heartfelt message to your friend.
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The letter maintains an appropriate and friendly tone, which is well-suited for a message to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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