The line graph show the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph show the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph gives information about the
number
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of patients who visited the clinic of a hospital during a week for four different reasons between 2010 and 2016.
Overall
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, it is important to note that there was an increase in the
number
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of
visitors
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who came for
Eye
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check-ups from 2010 to 2016 and the Diabetic
category
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during the specific time.
Moreover
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,
Birth
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control
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accounted for the most
number
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of
visitors
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in 2012
while
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the Dental
category
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stood at the lowest
number
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at the same time.
According to
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the
Eye
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figure,roughly 120 people went to the clinic for
Eye
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therapeutic interventions.
This
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number
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grew slightly and stood at approximately 150 in 2012.
similarly
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,approximately 70 people went into the hospital for diabetes interventions,and it increased slightly to 90 in 2012. The
number
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of
visitors
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for
eye
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problems climbed dramatically from 2012 onwards and peaked at 350
while
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the diabet figure levelled off from 2012 to 2014.
However
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, there was a steep increase from 2014 onwards. In terms of
birth
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control
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,
this
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category
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accounted for around 240 at the beginning of the period and peaked at about 270 after two years.
On the other hand
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,there was a considerable reduction in
number
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of
visitors
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for dental
category
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from 100 to around 60.
While
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the
number
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of
birth
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control
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visitors
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reduced sharply between 2012 and 2014,there was a significant growth in the
number
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of dental
visitors
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.Both
birth
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control
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and dental
visitors
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experienced a slight growth in 2016.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, eye, category, birth, control with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • weekly patients
  • clinics
  • hospital
  • 2010-2016
  • line graph
  • summarize
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • significant changes
  • notable differences
  • similarities
  • yearly fluctuations
  • patterns
  • variations
  • general observation
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