The line graph show the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph gives information about the
number
of patients who visited the clinic of a hospital during a week for four different reasons between 2010 and 2016.Overall
, it is important to note that there was an increase in the number
of visitors
who came for Eye
check-ups from 2010 to 2016 and the Diabetic category
during the specific time.Moreover
,Birth
control
accounted for the most number
of visitors
in 2012 while
the Dental category
stood at the lowest number
at the same time.
According to
the Eye
figure,roughly 120 people went to the clinic for Eye
therapeutic interventions.This
number
grew slightly and stood at approximately 150 in 2012.similarly
,approximately 70 people went into the hospital for diabetes interventions,and it increased slightly to 90 in 2012. The number
of visitors
for eye
problems climbed dramatically from 2012 onwards and peaked at 350 while
the diabet figure levelled off from 2012 to 2014.However
, there was a steep increase from 2014 onwards.
In terms of birth
control
,this
category
accounted for around 240 at the beginning of the period and peaked at about 270 after two years.On the other hand
,there was a considerable reduction in number
of visitors
for dental category
from 100 to around 60.While
the number
of birth
control
visitors
reduced sharply between 2012 and 2014,there was a significant growth in the number
of dental visitors
.Both birth
control
and dental visitors
experienced a slight growth in 2016.Submitted by mirhashemim7 on
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