The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line chart shows the
amount
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of carbon dioxide
emissions
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per
person
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in metric tonnes from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, the average CO2
emissions
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per
person
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in the
UK
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and
Sweden
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are experiencing a downward trend,
while
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Italy and Portugal went in the opposite direction. Despite the
reduce
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in CO2 emission per
person
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in the
UK
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, it’s still the top producer of CO2. Among the 4 countries given in the chart, the CO2
emissions
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per
person
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UK
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were the highest,
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then
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followed by
Sweden
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came at
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the 2nd place. Italy only holds half of the
amount
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of CO2
emissions
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per
person
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in
Sweden
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and
with
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apply
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Portugal
having
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the least
amount
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of CO2
emissions
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per
person
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. Even though the
UK
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gradually cut down their carbon footprint, they are still the most polluted country of the four.
Sweden
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in 1977
have
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had
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a sudden
increases
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increase
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of
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in
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CO2
emissions
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and
reach
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reached
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the
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peak of over 10 metric tonnes
that
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makes
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making
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it almost the same as the
UK
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. The rest of the period is just all four countries CO2
emissions
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decreases
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decrease
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significantly and slowly toward the end of
period
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with the year 2007 having the lowest
amount
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of CO2. Despite the low starting points, Italy and Portugal increased significantly making Italy
become
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the second most polluted country out of the four countries and Portugal having the same
amount
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of CO2
with
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as
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Sweden
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in 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, emissions, person, co, uk, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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