The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line chart shows the
amount
of carbon dioxide emissions
per person
in metric tonnes from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, the average CO2 emissions
per person
in the UK
and Sweden
are experiencing a downward trend, while
Italy and Portugal went in the opposite direction. Despite the reduce
in CO2 emission per Replace the word
reduction
person
in the UK
, it’s still the top producer of CO2.
Among the 4 countries given in the chart, the CO2 emissions
per person
UK
were the highest, then
followed by Rephrase
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Sweden
came at
the 2nd place. Italy only holds half of the Verb problem
in
amount
of CO2 emissions
per person
in Sweden
and with
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has
amount
of CO2 emissions
per person
.
Even though the UK
gradually cut down their carbon footprint, they are still the most polluted country of the four. Sweden
in 1977 have
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had
increases
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increase
of
CO2 Change preposition
in
emissions
and reach
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the
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UK
. The rest of the period is just all four countries CO2 emissions
decreases
significantly and slowly toward the end of Change the verb form
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period
with the year 2007 having the lowest Add an article
the period
amount
of CO2. Despite the low starting points, Italy and Portugal increased significantly making Italy become
the second most polluted country out of the four countries and Portugal having the same Verb problem
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amount
of CO2 with
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as
Sweden
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