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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neigbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school #programmes #charity #neigbourhood #sports #children
In the
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contemporary
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 are good
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 of
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 and harmonic society. That's why some people think that it is supposed to be obligatory in high schools. I think that
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work may be optional and not compulsory, but I still think that it is very important to speak about the effect of these
works
 from the early education period.  Unpaid community services may
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contribute
 a lot
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 the whole age
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 in each society,
hence
, some may think that it should
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 a part of high school
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schedules
.
For instance
, when I was a teenager, our teachers asked
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 to go over around the school and ask people to donate money for
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 patients. It was a very good experience
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 me and from
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 age I have learned that helping others for free may add a huge value to my life. 
On the other hand
, I think that pupils
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should
 not be
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complicated
compensated
 to do
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such
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,
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 the contrary, I think that
such
 acts should be done with
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big love and joy. People may
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 very well in every job they do when it is done from the heart. Pupils may appreciate
such
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voluntary works
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works
 much
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better if they understand why they should do it and how much it adds to the others.
To conclude
, I think that everyone can enjoy
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unpaid
society
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 work and
this
 is
very
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 good sign of
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comunity
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community
.
Nevertheless
, these
works
 may be more
valueble
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valuable
 if it is done when the one who
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believe
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 and
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 benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • compulsory part
  • high school programmes
  • charity
  • improving the neighborhood
  • teaching sports
  • civic engagement
  • sense of responsibility
  • valuable skills
  • personal development
  • academic development
  • bridging the gap
  • social and economic groups
  • equal opportunities
  • academic studies
  • extracurricular activities
  • flexibility
  • implementation
  • individual circumstances
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