35.The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

35.The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph displays how
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the families in a specific country spent their weekly earnings in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, the expenditure
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food
was a lot
more
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higher than
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the other products in 1968. The other
significan
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significant
feature of
this
graph is that in 2018, the highest waste was leisure,
while
fuel and power had the least spending.
Food
had a use of 35% of the income in 1968 triple that of housing tied in second place with clothing and
footware
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footwear
, which only had a percentage of 10%,
while
leisure only occupied 9% of their weekly remuneration. Household and personal goods
along with
transport had a proportion of approximately 7.5% each.
Furthermore
, fuel and power had the least payout with only 6%.
Food
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clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
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value was reduced by half, to around 17% and 5% respectively,
while
leisure made significant gains by increasing their value by nearly 13% to approximately 22%, overtaking
food
as the first ranked expenditure. At the same time, housing and
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waste rose to 19% and 14% respectively,
while
household goods remained stable and personal goods, fuel and power dropped to only 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
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