Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy? (Give reasons for your answers and include any relewant examples from your own knowledge or experience.)
Nobody can deny that happiness is
a
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an
essentail
part of Correct your spelling
essential
the
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apply
life
.Because satisfication
always Correct your spelling
satisfaction
boost
energy Correct subject-verb agreement
boosts
then
people
can concentrate on their work and raise the
production.Correct article usage
apply
Despite
, some individuals think that Correct pronoun usage
Despite this
money
is a
main reason Correct article usage
the
of
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for
the
pleasure.So,Correct article usage
apply
human-being
can Correct your spelling
human beings
fulifill
their desires.But,Correct your spelling
fulfil
Community
lives Correct article usage
the Community
happy
lifestyle by doing some different activities.
To start with,Correct article usage
a happy
firstly
,happiness is a
main thing .Which Correct article usage
the
make
our Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
life
better.But,money
also
matter
in Change the verb form
matters
life
.However
,Correct word choice
if peopel
peopel
want to Correct your spelling
people
luxery
lifestyle Correct your spelling
luxury
then
money
is important Add an article
the money
for
them.Change preposition
to
People
can achieve their goals by
good financial support and when they attain things ,which they want earn in their Change preposition
with
life
than feel happy from their inner.
Secondly
,people
can access better healthcare and good education.Nowdays
,society Correct the word
Nowadays
suffering
from many diseases.which Wrong verb form
suffers
is put
bad effects on their health.BecauseWrong verb form
have
,
poor persons can not afford the medicine and Remove the comma
apply
died
.Change the verb form
die
For instance
,a survey showed that 80% people
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of people
died
every Wrong verb form
die
years
.Which was suffered from Change to a singular noun
year
harmfull
Correct your spelling
harmful
disesaes
.Because they did not get medicine Correct your spelling
diseases
proper
.Which they need due Change the word
properly
the
poverty rate.Only rich Change preposition
to the
peopel
can approach the big hospitals.Correct your spelling
people
Hence
,wealthy persons
get good treatment and live Replace the word
people
happy
Add an article
a happy
life
.
On the other hand
,humankind can not buy the
happiness with Correct article usage
apply
money
.community
can purchase Correct article usage
The community
every- thing
Correct your spelling
everything
by
cash ,but not pleasure.Change preposition
with
Although
,many wealth
persons are not cherry .Because they have Replace the word
wealthy
strees
related to their business and how they should handle the property.Community can Correct your spelling
stress
lives
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live
happy
by spending time with their Change the adjective
happily
love
ones.Replace the word
loved
Indiviuals
should participate in social work Correct your spelling
Individuals
as well as
run the
social organizations. Correct article usage
apply
Which
helps to Correct pronoun usage
This
peopel
who Correct your spelling
people
real
need Replace the word
really
of
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apply
this
.In additional
,Replace the word
addition
peopel
can get gladness by Correct your spelling
people
pursuring
their hobbies and Correct your spelling
pursuing
take
Verb problem
apply
participate
in their favourite games.
Wrong verb form
participating
To sum up
,according to
my opinion,sound
mind lives in a sound body.so,Correct article usage
a sound
joyful
mood Correct article usage
a joyful
stay
healthy Change the verb form
stays
to
us.Change preposition
for
People
should do only those things which gives
to Change the verb form
give
satification
to them and should earn Correct your spelling
satisfaction
money
.But in limit.Because,
rich Remove the comma
apply
Correct your spelling
person
peson
forget how they should live their Correct your spelling
people
life
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