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The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graph illustrates the proportion of
adults
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that
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 used online shopping
platforms
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 with different frequencies in the US in 2015.
In addition
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, the bar graph shows the shopping preferences of American
adults
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that
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 order online frequently.
Overall
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, almost
a
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apply
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half of the population purchased goods online at least a few times a month;
however
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, all online shoppers reported their tendency for physical stores much
more
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higher than digital
platforms
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. In 2015, 15% of American
adults
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 had the habit of usage of cyber marketplaces weekly.
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, roughly
a
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one-third of
population
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the population
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 exhibited using those
platforms
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 a few times per month.
While
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 20% of people have never bought anything from websites, 37% of the population had the habit with less frequency.
According to
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 the data, roughly %30 of all online shoppers prefer
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apply
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digital shopping
platforms
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;
therefore
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, most of them
keep to
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prefer physical stores. There is a reverse correlation between
physical
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the physical
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 store
preferance
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preference
 of American
adults
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 and their online shopping frequency.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, platforms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • online purchasing habits
  • frequency
  • classification
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • demographics
  • consumer trends
  • e-commerce
  • data interpretation
  • purchasing categories
  • fiscal analysis
  • technological influence
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