Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not do enough physical exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are there to this problem?
Health has always been the prime concern of people on the planet since
time
immemorial. A number of doctors opined that,
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the popularity
exercise
has been
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However
, it can be solved in different ways.
There are specific reasons available regarding this
issue
. Firstly
, in this
modern world literally no one has enough time
to spend on their daily exercise
. To explain, people are being
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the workload
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exercise
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on physical activities
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with family. Secondly
, many of them not
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benefits
exercise
. Therefore
, they tend to do some other activities
, which is comparatively effortless. Finally
, the
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On the other hand
, however
, exercise
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resolving
this
issue
. Initially
, the
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time
management plays a vital role regards to this
issue
. For example
, if a person can allocate a minimum amount of time
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In addition
, there should be awareness classes from the side of government. For example
, when people understand the importance of exercise
from the authorities, it tends them to do the exercises in more
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Furthermore
, it is also
individuals responsibility
of being healthy. Add an article
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Thus
, they should have to do more phisical
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physical
activities
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, time
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. Also
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