The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012
The given line graph illustrates the changes in the crime
rate
of burglary, car theft, and robbery which were
comitted
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committed
in Manchester downtown over 9 years from 2003-2012.
It is clear that
the different kinds of
crimes
had multidirectional trends over the shown period of time,
while
some of them slightly rose,
while
others dropped down significantly. In 2003, right after a slight growth, both
crimes
of burglary and car stealing showed a downward trend. Meanwhile, between 2006 and 2007, both
crimes
stood at the same number.
Nevertheless
, after 2007 trends switched in different directions and burglary started to decline in a fast manner reaching 1500 cases per year and stayed at
this
rate
until 2012 without any meaningful fluctuations.
In contrast
, car theft began increasing until it reached the
rate
of 2800 situations in 2012.
On the other hand
, the robbery
rate
went
uo
Correct your spelling
up
from 500 to 900 cases until 2005. After 2006, the
rate
of robbery stabilized at 500. In the next six years, the
rate
of
this
category of
crimes
did not change.
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