The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012
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The given line graph illustrates the changes in the crime
rate
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of burglary, car theft, and robbery which were
comitted
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committed
in Manchester downtown over 9 years from 2003-2012.
It is clear that
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the different kinds of
crimes
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had multidirectional trends over the shown period of time,
while
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some of them slightly rose,
while
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others dropped down significantly. In 2003, right after a slight growth, both
crimes
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of burglary and car stealing showed a downward trend. Meanwhile, between 2006 and 2007, both
crimes
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stood at the same number.
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, after 2007 trends switched in different directions and burglary started to decline in a fast manner reaching 1500 cases per year and stayed at
this
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rate
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until 2012 without any meaningful fluctuations.
In contrast
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, car theft began increasing until it reached the
rate
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of 2800 situations in 2012.
On the other hand
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, the robbery
rate
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went
uo
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up
from 500 to 900 cases until 2005. After 2006, the
rate
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of robbery stabilized at 500. In the next six years, the
rate
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of
this
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category of
crimes
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did not change.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, crimes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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