The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods.
The bar graph illustrates the amount of expenses on five different consumer items
by
Change preposition
in
UK
and Correct article usage
the UK
France
in 2010. Overall
, both countries spent most on cars, computers and books, on the other hand
, paid less on perfume and cameras. The difference between the two groups were
almost double.
Change the verb form
was
First,
both countries purchased mostly on
cars, computers and books. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, cars had the highest sales in France
and the UK
with 400,000 and 450,000 respectively. Then
, the second most
highest expense Change the adjective
apply
were
computers for Correct subject-verb agreement
was
France
which was 40,000 higher than UK
, as well as
, books for UK
which was 100,000 more than Correct article usage
the UK
France
.
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in France
However
, perfume and cameras had the smallest amount of paid expenses. For the UK
, cameras had the
higher sales which was significant since it was triple Correct article usage
apply
of
the amount paid by Change preposition
apply
France
consumers. While
for perfume expenditures, France
was at 200,000,
and was 51,000 higher than the Remove the comma
apply
UK
sales.Submitted by ronica.adriano on
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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