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People are living in a 'throwaway society ' using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this ? What problems does it lead to ?

#people #society #time
In our present society,
people
 have used more disposable items. They are utilizing the short-life things and throw
away
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them away
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 after use. The reasons are clear, the recycling industry produces cheap products, which are not durable and their life spans are short. On the
another
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other
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 hand,
due to
such
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a scenario
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scenario
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scenario,
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 several problems are generated, the lifestyle becomes expensive and
people
 need more money to afford housing, etc. In my observation, to keep the environment clean, the manufacturing industries
intent
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intend
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 to use natural organic materials to manufacture products, and they have started to use inorganic, synthetic components.
For example
, before pure wooden furniture was used, they were durable and had a long life. Presently, wooden chipboards and
by-product
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by-products
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 of plastic are used to enable housing and office furnishing, etc. They are more beautiful, and less expensive but not lifelong.
On the other hand
, several hazards are generated, the
people
 need more money to maintain life on Earth. Before, one earning member was enough to afford several family members. Presently, multiple earning members, and
source
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sources
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 of
earning
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earnings
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required
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are required
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.
Moreover
,
due to
increased
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the increased
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consumsion
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consumption
 of items, more garbage has
generated
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been generated
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,
that
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which
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 increased
enviromental
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environmental
 pollution.
For instance
,
disposible
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disposable
 plastic utensils are in trend, plastic bags and bottles, once these items are used,
people
 through
it
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its
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way
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away
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. It will
increases
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increase
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 both wastage and expenses. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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manufacturing companies, to
inceases
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increase
increases
 their profit and productivity focus more on undurable products, and promote
its
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their
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 marketing.
This
 will not only
increases
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increase
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financial
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the financial
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 burden on society but
also
raised
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raise
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enviromental
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environmental
 hazards.
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