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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.

In
this
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 day and age, it is believed/argued by some that keeping
animals
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 in
zoos
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 is unethical
while
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 others think that
zoos
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 can serve as places to entertain
people
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 and protect
animals
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.
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 the former view may be true to a certain extent, I personally believe that
zoos
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 may have benefits in terms of providing entertainment for
people
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 and protection for
animals
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. On the one hand, there are certain reasons why keeping
animals
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 in
zoos
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 is wrong. The first reason is that the
animals
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 which are kept in
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zoos
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 may not be able to adapt to living in captivity.
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 is mainly because living in a small place will make them get stressed and feel imprisoned.
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, the
animals
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 which are kept in
zoos
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 will lose their survival instinct. The second reason is that
animal’s
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 exploitation can occur in
zoos
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.
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, there may be many negative effects on
animals
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’ health.
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, in many
zoos
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, zoo owners serve their tourists by making elephants or ostriches carry tourists on their
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.
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, many elephants and ostriches in
zoos
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 have scoliosis.
On the other hand
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, it is my firm belief that
zoos
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 are both entertaining and ecologically significant.
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 with, there may be many species of
animals
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 in
zoos
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, so
people
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 can discover new
animals
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.
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, visiting
animals
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 in
zoos
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 can improve visitors’ knowledge about
animals
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 and help them relax after study or work.
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, kindergartens or primary schools usually organize many trips to visit
zoos
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 in experiential activities.
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, rare
animals
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 can be conserved in
zoos
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. The main reason is that
zoos
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 are safe places for
animals
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 because there are no predators
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 hunters that find them to kill them.
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, in China, pandas are going to be extinct so they are taken to
zoos
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 to be looked after. In conclusion,
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 keeping
animals
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 in
zoos
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 can have some demerits regarding
animals
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 not being able to adapt to living in the zoo and being exploited, I am firmly convinced that the merits in terms of
people
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 being able to discover
animals
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 and rare
animals
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 being conserved are weightier.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • captivity
  • natural habitat
  • artificial enclosures
  • genetic diversity
  • animal welfare
  • conservation efforts
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • education platform
  • breeding programs
  • reintroduction
  • psychological suffering
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