The graph below shows the unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008.

The graph below shows the unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of the unemployment levels in Ireland
as well as
the
statistic
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statistics
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of
people
leaving the country from 1988 to 2008.
Overall
, the jobless
rate
reached
peak
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a peak
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in the first year,
while
the figure for
resident
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residents
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leaving was highest in the next year.
In addition
, both the unemployment
rate
and migrants witnessed a significant decline in the following years and
then
increased slightly again
at the end
of the year. Look in detail at the unemployment
rate
, in 1998 the number of
people
who were unemployed hit the highest point at 18%, and
then
had a
steadily
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decrease to 16% in 1990. Over the next ten years, the percentage of jobless
people
had a significant decline to under 6% and had slight fluctuation before
risingto
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rising to
rising
roughly 10% in 2008. Turning to the figure for citizens leaving Ireland, 40,000
people
left the country at the beginning of the timeframe,
after
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that,
reach
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reached
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a peak at 70,000. In 1990, the
rate
fell rapidly and remained at around 30,000 until 2004. By the end of the period, 40,000 inhabitants
leaving
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had left
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the country.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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