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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Others believe that there are health benefits to living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often thought that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the
countryside
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 others believe that there are health benefits to living in cities. In my opinion, I believe that living in rural areas is healthier than in urban areas. On the one hand,
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 some, living in the
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 is easier to have a healthy life, and I agree.
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, in the village, people can find fresh local sources produced easily.
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, the farmers can grow vegetables and have fresh produce to make healthy food.
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,
countryside
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 inhabitants are able to do activities,
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 as hiking and gardening to have a healthy lifestyle.
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, they will be physically active and
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 undoubtedly will help them to stay fit and healthy without any serious medical conditions including obesity.
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, urban residents think living in the metropolitan area leads to healthy lifestyles. One reason is that cities have greater access to healthcare facilities, specialists and medical services.
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, when urban dwellers have medical problems, they have easy access to hospitals, and in the case of an emergency,
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, they can call an ambulance. Another reason is that city dwellers have wider options for fitness facilities.
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 to say, they can be physically active by going to the gym and yoga studio or having group exercise classes namely Zumba.
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 people may vary in their opinions, I think that living in rural regions is healthier than urban areas because of fresh air, less air pollution and fewer factories. If everyone chose to live in the
countryside
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, they would have a healthy lifestyle easily
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