Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Considerably individuals live some people believe that

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should be their privacy and should not be shared too public. I strongly agree

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the statement. Nowadays people are able to track others by social

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whether where they are or where they went.

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Celebrities

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private

live

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should not be shared

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media

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their own safety. Some Fanclub tried to follow their

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celebrities

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without giving them space, some

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to stalk where they

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, and some

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to hide cameras in their private places.

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is a result of not giving them their own

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and space as

human

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they are just like other normal people.

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,

celebrities

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’ private

picture

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like

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picture

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in

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the bathroom

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bathroom

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or

bedroom

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may be shared by

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Fanclub without them having consent.

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, these may embarrass them and it may impact their future work and

lives

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.

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, Individuals these days

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that

celebrities

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are different,

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, they are just as normal as us. Many

celebrities

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this

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day use most of their day time with work

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as

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going

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concert

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, shooting

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, and going to events that

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all of their time in a day. Meanwhile, if they

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their own time, they would not want to

spent

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it as

celebrities

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though they would want

peoples

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to treat them normally. On the other

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, if Fanclubs

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them in malls or

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enjoying their self-time,

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,

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they

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to

a

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post

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of them on social

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while

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they are resting

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cause

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many other individuals to follow them

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may lead

their

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mental health

problem

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and depression because they would not be able to spent their privates

lives

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this

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is why we should not share their privacy through

media

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. In conclusion,

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Celebrities

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lives

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should be

close

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privately and not be shared too

other

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others

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.

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their own safety concern and their future

lives

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.

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,

celebrities

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’ mental health and how they live in their everyday

lives

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.