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Write about the following topic: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society? Give reasons for your answer.

#topic #freedom #speech #society
In the
last
 decade, there has been considerable debate over the role of free
speech
 in a free
society
. Some object to absolute
freedom
 of
speech
. Others advocate free
speech
, arguing that
the
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freedom
 of
speech
 is the single most important political right of citizens in a civilized
society
. Whilst I believe that there are strong arguments on both sides, I would suggest that
freedom
 of
speech
 should be protected in all but extreme circumstances.
The
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freedom
 of
speech
 is important at all levels
in
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a
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society
. Yet it is most important for the governments. A government which does not know what the people feel and think is in a dangerous position.
This
 is how the communist regimes of Eastern Europe were toppled in the 1980s. The same is happening again in other regions of the world today. The governments that muzzle free
speech
 run a risk of pushing their people to behave destructively or to rebel.
Furthermore
, without free
speech
 no political action is possible and no resistance to injustice and oppression is possible. Without free
speech
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 elections would have no meaning at all.
Policies
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 of contestants become known to the public and become responsive to public opinion only by virtue of free
speech
. Between
elections
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 the freely expressed opinions of citizens help restrain oppressive rule. Without
this
freedom
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 it is futile to expect political
freedom
 or
consequently
 economic
freedom
. In conclusion, I believe that the importance of free
speech
 as a basic and valuable characteristic of a free
society
 cannot be underestimated. It may be challenging for
society
 to allow differences of opinion out into the open;
however
, the consequences of restricting free
speech
 are likely to be more damaging in the longer term.
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