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Write about the following topic: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society? Give reasons for your answer.

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In the
last
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 decade, there has been considerable debate over the role of free
speech
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 in a free
society
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. Some object to absolute
freedom
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 of
speech
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. Others advocate free
speech
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, arguing that
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freedom
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 of
speech
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 is the single most important political right of citizens in a civilized
society
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. Whilst I believe that there are strong arguments on both sides, I would suggest that
freedom
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 of
speech
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 should be protected in all but extreme circumstances.
The
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freedom
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 of
speech
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 is important at all levels
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a
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society
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. Yet it is most important for the governments. A government which does not know what the people feel and think is in a dangerous position.
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 is how the communist regimes of Eastern Europe were toppled in the 1980s. The same is happening again in other regions of the world today. The governments that muzzle free
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 run a risk of pushing their people to behave destructively or to rebel.
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, without free
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 no political action is possible and no resistance to injustice and oppression is possible. Without free
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speech
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 elections would have no meaning at all.
Policies
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The policies
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 of contestants become known to the public and become responsive to public opinion only by virtue of free
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. Between
elections
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 the freely expressed opinions of citizens help restrain oppressive rule. Without
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freedom
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freedom,
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 it is futile to expect political
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 or
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 economic
freedom
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. In conclusion, I believe that the importance of free
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 as a basic and valuable characteristic of a free
society
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 cannot be underestimated. It may be challenging for
society
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 to allow differences of opinion out into the open;
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, the consequences of restricting free
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 are likely to be more damaging in the longer term.
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