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The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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The given maps illustrate the radial changes
of
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in
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 the waterfront
area
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 of Darwin Town over a
five years
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five-year
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 period from 2009 to 2014.
Overall
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, most of the industrial areas have significantly changed, which were demolished to make way for the vast woodland and the housing
area
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 .
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, there have
also
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constructions
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been constructions
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 of a few more buildings added around the town. Regarding the northern
area
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 of the map, a swimming pool was built between the school and the lake, replacing the previous industrial
area
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 . To the north of
this
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 building,
conventional
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the conventional
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 center and school remained the same over the course of five years. Notably, there were two large swimming pools beside the walkway, which led to the fishing zone
as well as
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 the sea. Turning to the western of the town,
an
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a
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 university building was erected
while
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 three more residential buildings were built in the
center
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centre
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, raising the total
numbers
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number
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 of
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the building
a building
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building
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buildings
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 to six.
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, a footpath stretching from the western main road was constructed leading to the newly built
harbor
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harbour
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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