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The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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floor
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the floor
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 plan of a house between
current
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the current
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 and
propose
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proposed
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plan
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a plan
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 for several building
work
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works
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.
Overall
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, the ground floor witnessed
gradual
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a gradual
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 change with the expansion and changes
of
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in
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 some areas.
According to
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 the data, in the current situation, from the entrance a hall
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stairs
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stair
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directly
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is directly
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 seen which it it used as
way
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a way
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 to
went
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go
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 to the living
room
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.
Furthermore
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, there
was
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were
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 two walls that
divide
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divided
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 two main rooms ( living
room
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 and kitchen) and
at the end
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 of the wall 2 door
provided
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were provided
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 to enter those rooms. the biggest area
in
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on
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 the right side was
kitchen
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the kitchen
a kitchen
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. There was
also
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 a storage situated right under the
stairs
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.
Furthermore
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, based on the proposed changes,
position
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the position
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 of the door that used to be located after the
stairs
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Linking Words
then
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was then
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 replaced to the
stairs
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 and
doors
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the doors
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is
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were
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 moved right after the
entrace
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entrance
 to connect access to the kitchen. On the
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contrary
contatry
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contatry,
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 the wall that
separate
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separates
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living
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the living
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room
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 and the
stairs
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 has been demolished and the living
room
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 area become bigger than before.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stairs, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ground floor plan
  • existing layout
  • proposed plan
  • building work
  • key features
  • expansion
  • alterations
  • space utilization
  • functionality
  • aesthetic appeal
  • natural light
  • inhabitants
  • quality of life
  • enhanced flow
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