Some parents give their children everything that their children ask for and accept what their children want to do. Is this good for children? What could be the consequences for these children when they grow up?

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Parents nowadays provide everything their
children
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request and accept
to
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everything their
children
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want to do.
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,
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will have a drawback
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children
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.
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essay will discuss the consequences of spoiling
children
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Firstly
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, spoiling
children
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can make them selfish and rude,
this
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is a bad way to raise adolescents,
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the low reproduction parents focus on their
children
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's happiness without considering the results ,
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,
children
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will become
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and just care about their interests and don'
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care others feelings,
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, spoiling won'
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make them have friends and they won'
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obey any rules or traditions.
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, they will become aggressive if they can'
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get a toy
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will be difficult for them because they always get what they want.
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, spoiled
children
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will
easy
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commit
crime
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when they become older because there
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lot of obligations and rules in
workplace
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for example
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, but they won'
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follow the rules
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that
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aren'
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used to them. In conclusion, there are bad consequences for spoiled
children
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so
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parents should stop for their ultimate happiness.
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  • rejection
  • entitlement
  • realistic expectations
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  • criticism
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