Some people think that the inteernet has brought people closer togethert while others that people and communities are bbecome more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The
internet
has facilitated communication and connection among
people
around the world, so many
people
think that
this
action
is help
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people
close up,
while
someone
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some
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think that social media will
making
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people
lonely. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument,
while
I support the former opinion. On the
first
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hand, many
people
think that the
internet
is a good way to keep in touch with other
people
from around the world ,and if they do not have
the
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new
innovation
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innovations
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, they will hard to contact
with
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others
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other
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people
.
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as my parents
who
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alway
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always
use
facebook
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and
line
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application to chat with my brother who
is working
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works
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abord
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abroad
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in
everyday
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,
in addition
, the video from the application can help them to see each
others
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other
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. So, I think that new
plathforms
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platforms
are very
benefits
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for us because
this
action is a very easy way to
communication
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communicate
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.
On the other hand
, the development of new technology may
making
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make
be making
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our
life
boring ,and
someone
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some
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are
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may
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feeling
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feel
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lonely because they
are thinking
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think
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that the technology are not
a
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real
life
for example
, they never met
people
in
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face to face. So, they think that if they meet
people
online in
everyday
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, they will
be do
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not have sociable. So, I think that
this
case may be harmful in the future. So,I think that the
internet
can be
positives
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and
negatives
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negative
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for us, but we have many ways to solve the
negatives
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problem.
Firstly
,
people
who always online working, they should be
to
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able to
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spend time
in
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other activities like
hang
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out with
others
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other
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people
. To
conculd
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conclude
, the development of new innovation
make
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our
life
more
esay
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easy
essay
,but sometime the
internet
may our
life
isolated. So, I think that the way to use the media
is
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times like
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focus
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the time to play them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • facilitated
  • connection
  • geographical barriers
  • social media platforms
  • sense of belonging
  • diverse perspectives
  • collaborate
  • share knowledge
  • excessive use
  • social isolation
  • face-to-face interaction
  • addicted
  • disconnection
  • physical surroundings
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • withdraw
  • false sense of connection
  • superficial relationships
  • polarization
  • echo chambers
  • balance
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • foster
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