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describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.
#growth #products #countries #globalisers #non-globalisers
This
 bar chart depicts the changes
of
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 the percentage of Gross Domestic
Product
 from 1960 - 1990 in three categories ( Wealthy
countries
,
Globalisers
, Non-
Globalisers
) .it's clear from the graph that, the percentage of Domestic
Product
 for both Wealthy
countries
 and
Non
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Non-Globalisers
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Globalisers
 had declined throughout the period.
While
Globalisers
 showed a
consistently increased
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 in the GPD growth.
According to
 what is shown, in
1960s
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,
Weathy
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Wealthy
countries
 accounted for the highest GPD proportion, followed by Non-
Globalisers
,
while
Globalisers
 had the lowest. In the following 10- years, all three categories observed a similar pattern of Gross Domestic
Product
 rate that ranged from 2.8% - 3.1%.
Furthermore
,the Gross Domestic
Product
 of
Globalisers
 in 19980, had accounted for 3.5%,
whereas
 Wealthy
countries
 illustrated just over 2 per cent , and
then
Non
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Non-Globalisers
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Globalisers
 had the lowest rate just
in
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below 1 per cent.
However
,
Globalisers
 had reached
the
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 peak
in
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arround
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around
 4,9
per
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cent
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cents
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,
while
 the other two categories remained below 2 % .
To sum up
 , Wealthy
countries
 should
a
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decreased pattern in the GPD population throughout the decades.
In contrast
 to
Globalisers
that
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experienced an increased trend over the years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words product, countries, globalisers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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