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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season . Some people consider it a good idea , but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Introduction
It is argued by many
people
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 that
planes
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 have been
risely
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widely
 used to deliver fruits and vegetables to somewhere like hardly grow or end season . It
help
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helps
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people
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at
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there have something to eat fastly . I agree that it is very expensive to
use
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 aircraft.
Body · 1
The main reason why some
people
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 say that should
use
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planes
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 to
transport
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 to some lack of food
that
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planes
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is
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 very fast . Almost
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 only take
few
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a few
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 hours to reach there .
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 , some
planes
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 can
transport
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 a lot of fruits and vegetables to somewhere
need
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 in two or three hours in good weather . It
help
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people
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at
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here will have something to eat .
Body · 2
However
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 , I disagree that
price
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the price
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 of
use
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aircrafts
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aircraft
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are
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 very expensive . To
explane
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explain
, if they want to
use
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planes
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 to deliver
a
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apply
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various
of
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goods , they will
use
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a very big
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very big planes
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planes
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 . So , it
need
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used
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a lot of money to repair and change new facilities .
As a consequence
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 ,
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the amounts
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amounts
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amount
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 of money for
use
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planes
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always
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is always
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 more than five to ten times with price of
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use
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using
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ship
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ships
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 to
transport
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 fruits and vegetables.
Conclusion
In conclusion , some
people
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believed
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believe
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 that
increasing
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the increasing
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use
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planes
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of planes
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 to deliver goods to somewhere can't grow or in
end
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an end
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 season is so fast .
Nevertheless
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 ,it is my opinion that it is too
luxury
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luxurious
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 for us to
use
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a
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apply
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various
of
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apply
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planes
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 to
transport
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.

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