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You are currently attending a course which is not the same as per the description in the admission brochure. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter,  state which course you are enrolled in  provide details about the noted differences  suggest what actions would you like him to take Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with
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 three-week
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 on C and C++ programming conducted by your college.
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According to the
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 brochure that was distributed during admissions time, mentions both the
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 and the fact that there is no need for experience and to learn from basics to in-depth in
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. But when I joined the class, I found the total opposite of the brochure. The teacher teaches as an experienced student.
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 I discuss
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 with the teacher. He says
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 is the advanced
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 of programming. In the reference details of
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 brochure, I paid for
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 for Rs. 10,000. If you have another
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 as per my requirement, please exchange my
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 with them. If
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 is not available, I urge you to refund my full admission fees. I am looking forward to hearing from you Yours Sincerely,
Lavneet
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Navneet
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coherence cohesion
Provide more details about the differences between the course and the brochure.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal greeting and closing.
coherence cohesion
Focus on one main idea per paragraph and develop it fully.
task achievement
Provide more information about the specific actions you would like the headmaster to take.
lexical resource
Use more academic and formal vocabulary throughout the letter.
grammatical range
Vary your sentence structures and use complex sentences to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical structures.
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