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Some people think that you can never become fluent in a languange unless you have spent time living or working in that country. To what extent do you agree?

#people #languange #time #country
İt
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It
 is known that if learn to new
language
 fluent,
this
 is so important is go to the
country
 which is we want to learn their
language
.
İt
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It
 is so important to do practical, i strongly believe that it is possibile both.
This
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i
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I
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will
expline
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explain
explore
learn to
by
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be
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 with and without
travel
. on the one hand,
speak fluent
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speaking
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 a
language
 possible with
practic
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practice
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 too much. A way
for
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to
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 get fluent speak is
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to travel
traveling
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travel
another
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to another
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the
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country
.
For instance
,
i
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I
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 went to
UK
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the UK
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for
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to
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 speak like
native
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a native
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 English speaker and ı could find
speak
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some people in
streets
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the streets
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, molls,
hotel
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hotels
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 or
restorants
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restaurants
restaurant
. in short,
every where
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everywhere
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.
However
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ı
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I
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 can find some people to
do
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apply
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speak just courses in my
country
. in abroad we can find
alat
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a lot
 of people to
do
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practic
while
 we can speak fluent
speak
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apply
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.
On the other hand
, we live
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in teacnology
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teacnology
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technology
 times and we can use it to learn a new
anguage
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language
evin
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even
 speak fluently because we can find there
a
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are a
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lot of tutors and
friands
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friends
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.
For example
, I found a teacher who is from
UK
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the UK
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ı
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and
 can speak fluently English thanks
to
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apply
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he
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him
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. There is
not
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no
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 need
travel
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to travel
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, stay home and
travel
 the world.
İn
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In
 old times who
is want
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wanted
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 to speak
fluently
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a
language
,
he
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apply
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had to
travel
 the
country
.
however
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however,
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 it
is not need
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is not needed
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naw
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now
, thanks to
intetnet
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internet
.
To sum up
,
speak fluently
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speaking
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 a
language
 is
possibe
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possible
 with
practic
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practice
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.
İf
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If
 you
travel
 the
country
 you can get
a
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to a
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lof
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lot
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 of practical places or you can stay and home and
do surfing
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surf
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 you can find some
frend
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friends
 to
do
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speak
.
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İn
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In
 my opinion, it is not important
where
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whether
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 you learn online or reel. Must
importand
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important
 is do
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practice
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 to much.
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